Comments on: Five One Line Haiku http://bgfay47.wordpress.com/2007/03/26/five-one-line-haiku/ poems and stuff that looks like poetry Tue, 19 Aug 2008 04:27:25 +0000 http://wordpress.com/ hourly 1 By: martin http://bgfay47.wordpress.com/2007/03/26/five-one-line-haiku/#comment-575 martin Tue, 19 Aug 2008 04:27:25 +0000 http://bgfay47.wordpress.com/2007/03/26/five-one-line-haiku/#comment-575 a distant blossom unfolds into an egret a distant blossom unfolds into an egret

]]> By: dpoetic1 http://bgfay47.wordpress.com/2007/03/26/five-one-line-haiku/#comment-411 dpoetic1 Mon, 02 Apr 2007 04:18:49 +0000 http://bgfay47.wordpress.com/2007/03/26/five-one-line-haiku/#comment-411 ...beautiful, I enjoyed it! …beautiful, I enjoyed it!

]]> By: Becca http://bgfay47.wordpress.com/2007/03/26/five-one-line-haiku/#comment-405 Becca Thu, 29 Mar 2007 02:06:24 +0000 http://bgfay47.wordpress.com/2007/03/26/five-one-line-haiku/#comment-405 I agree with Jem...when I read the snow haiku, I could actually feel my heartbeat slowing down...down...down Amazing, with so few words. Quite masterful! I agree with Jem…when I read the snow haiku, I could actually feel my heartbeat slowing down…down…down

Amazing, with so few words. Quite masterful!

]]> By: jem http://bgfay47.wordpress.com/2007/03/26/five-one-line-haiku/#comment-404 jem Wed, 28 Mar 2007 10:33:22 +0000 http://bgfay47.wordpress.com/2007/03/26/five-one-line-haiku/#comment-404 The snow one is especially strong for me. It really made me pause, slow my breathing and focus on every word. When there are many each word has far greater impact. The snow one is especially strong for me. It really made me pause, slow my breathing and focus on every word. When there are many each word has far greater impact.

]]> By: Marcia (MeeAugraphie) http://bgfay47.wordpress.com/2007/03/26/five-one-line-haiku/#comment-403 Marcia (MeeAugraphie) Wed, 28 Mar 2007 04:35:42 +0000 http://bgfay47.wordpress.com/2007/03/26/five-one-line-haiku/#comment-403 The first is my favorite, but I had fun making my voice fall down down down with the leaves. The first is my favorite, but I had fun making my voice fall down down down with the leaves.

]]> By: bgfay http://bgfay47.wordpress.com/2007/03/26/five-one-line-haiku/#comment-401 bgfay Tue, 27 Mar 2007 19:42:49 +0000 http://bgfay47.wordpress.com/2007/03/26/five-one-line-haiku/#comment-401 When the prompt came out on One Deep Breath I had no idea whatsoever how to do it. I'm seeing more and more how they work. And Gerald, I love the "almost tolerate" line. I thought I was the only one who talked like that! When the prompt came out on One Deep Breath I had no idea whatsoever how to do it. I’m seeing more and more how they work.

And Gerald, I love the “almost tolerate” line. I thought I was the only one who talked like that!

]]> By: Gerald http://bgfay47.wordpress.com/2007/03/26/five-one-line-haiku/#comment-400 Gerald Tue, 27 Mar 2007 18:54:05 +0000 http://bgfay47.wordpress.com/2007/03/26/five-one-line-haiku/#comment-400 one of the points about one-line haiku [the term "one-liners" grates] is that they should flow and punctuation normally stops the flow whereas lack of punctuation allows the words to interact with each other more giving the chance of multiple experiences for the reader. I like the first of these most and can almost tolerate the presence of the full stop as being integral one of the points about one-line haiku [the term "one-liners" grates] is that they should flow and punctuation normally stops the flow whereas lack of punctuation allows the words to interact with each other more giving the chance of multiple experiences for the reader.

I like the first of these most and can almost tolerate the presence of the full stop as being integral

]]> By: bgfay http://bgfay47.wordpress.com/2007/03/26/five-one-line-haiku/#comment-399 bgfay Tue, 27 Mar 2007 17:39:10 +0000 http://bgfay47.wordpress.com/2007/03/26/five-one-line-haiku/#comment-399 I'm partial to punctuation too, but that's mostly because I'm such a tight-ass. I like the control it gives me over the movement of the reading. David Shumate, a prose poet, had some good things to say about this. He uses punctuation as well as any poet I've ever read. Did I just admit to the world that I'm a tight-ass? I’m partial to punctuation too, but that’s mostly because I’m such a tight-ass. I like the control it gives me over the movement of the reading. David Shumate, a prose poet, had some good things to say about this. He uses punctuation as well as any poet I’ve ever read.

Did I just admit to the world that I’m a tight-ass?

]]> By: Rose Dewy Knickers http://bgfay47.wordpress.com/2007/03/26/five-one-line-haiku/#comment-398 Rose Dewy Knickers Tue, 27 Mar 2007 16:49:47 +0000 http://bgfay47.wordpress.com/2007/03/26/five-one-line-haiku/#comment-398 I like the separation like this. Just like the seasons. I used punctuation in my one liners, am I a bad girl? ;) Rose xo I like the separation like this. Just like the seasons.

I used punctuation in my one liners, am I a bad girl? ;)

Rose

xo

]]> By: Ron http://bgfay47.wordpress.com/2007/03/26/five-one-line-haiku/#comment-397 Ron Tue, 27 Mar 2007 16:07:17 +0000 http://bgfay47.wordpress.com/2007/03/26/five-one-line-haiku/#comment-397 As a 60 something I relate to the first one too. The "leaves fall down down down" is also a great one like Regina said. About the punctuation thing I read this on the Haiku clinic page: ' A one-line poem does not include forced pauses, indicated by space, grammar, syntax, or punctuation, though it may include logical punctuation, as in the case of multiple adjectives preceding a noun.' Oh, well, what are rules for if not the breaking? As a 60 something I relate to the first one too. The “leaves fall down down down” is also a great one like Regina said.
About the punctuation thing I read this on the Haiku clinic page:
‘ A one-line poem does not include forced pauses, indicated by space, grammar, syntax, or punctuation, though it may include logical punctuation, as in the case of multiple adjectives preceding a noun.’ Oh, well, what are rules for if not the breaking?

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